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[Caen Fred]

Our logistical offer will move you !

Our logistics offer will move you !

Hello, I need your help on this one, I am designing a brochure for one of my client. I would like to use one of those formula above, we do not all agree on the proper words to use. Does it make sense for a north American/Canadian?

This is not Z related, but I count on the help of the nicest bunch of peoples around !!!!

Thanks, Fred

http://www.montgomery-ouest.com/couv.jpg

[sjcurtis]

Fred,

that looks very good from an Aussie perspective, gets your intent across well.

cheers

Steve :classic:

[Caen Fred]

Thank's a lot, looking forward to my pack of Frosters in front of the Rugby world cup... see you there, beyong the screen!

So that's one yes

[kyteler]

What you have in the image sounds right.

Our logistical offer will move you !

Sounds like you're referring to the offer as logistical.

Our logistics offer will move you !

Sounds like your offer is in regards to logistics.

Unless I'm mad. :stupid: :stupid: :classic:

[Caen Fred]

Thanks a lot, New Zealand is one of the few countrys I have to visit before I pas........

[1 Bravo 6]

ROFL

G'Day Fred,

I agree with the KIWI

Rick.

[Caen Fred]

Thanks, look very busy down there...

Have fun

[peterc]

Fred,

From this Canucks point of view, "Logistics" is the better of the two.

Cheers,

Peter

[Caen Fred]

Ahah going north now! Thanks my Canadian friend.

PS : Allan if you want to give your Professional point of view your welcome! I am looking for "worldwide English" but I do appreciate those little differences between UK and others.

[HS30-H]

OK Fred - since you invited me.............:cheeky:

I don't understand about the word "offer" in the phrase. What is on offer? Who is offering? Anyone looking at that page already knows that they are there to have something offered to them. No?

If I were a customer who was looking for the logistics services of this company, then I would have thought the phrase "Our logistics will move you" or "Our logistics services will move you" would be a nice pun that still gets the point across.

But then, as an Englishman, what would I know about English?

Alan T.

[Caen Fred]

Ok I see...

Well, the "offer" is developed inside the brochure and relate to the investments they made in men and services, which make a "Global offer" for the client... You may be right and I will also propose the shortened version to our client.

Thanks to all…

[kmack]

Just to throw in my Texan vote, Fred, "logistics" sounds better to me. I vote for the 2nd one.